Can someone help me make this email more professional, with punctuation and wording?
Tonight there was an incident, which took place at the Globe yard. Jon pulled into the yard loaded with two vehicles. While Jon was pulling into the Mesa yard, the gate closed on the rear vehicle in tow, a stolen recovery. No damage occurred to the vehicle except a flat tire, according to Jon, and no damage caused to the truck. All damage occurred to the sliding electric gate. The gate can still somewhat close, but the damage can still allow someone access to the yard through the gate if attempted.
I attempted to reach our mechanic, Mark, at 12:20AM and was unable to contact him, but did leave a message. I instructed a driver to nudge the forklift against the gate until repairs are to be made. For now, the drivers can access the yard through the gate adjacent to the front office
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Tonight there was an incident at the Globe yard. Jon pulled into the yard, loaded with two vehicles. While Jon was pulling into the Mesa yard, the gate closed on the rear vehicle (a stolen recovery). According to Jon, the only damage to the vehicle was a flat tire, and no damage was done to the truck. The sliding electric gate was damaged though – the gate can still close, but someone may be able to access the yard through the gate if they try.
I attempted to reach our mechanic, Mark, at 12:20AM, but was unable to contact him. I have left him a message. I have instructed a driver to nudge the forklift against the gate until the repairs have been made. For now, the drivers can access the yard through the gate adjacent to the front office.
[Only small changes really - you're not that bad! Hope this helps!]
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